100 wc

August 21, 2016 - 100 word challenge

…as I stared into the water it began to turn green… I was shocked! I had never been in water so dirty.  It was bad. Everyone was forced out of the pool so they could clean it. I was happy because dirty water has harmful bacteria/ germs in it.

They pumped a lot of chlorine into the pool after they had finished most of the pool was chlorine and very very dangerous to be near because of how much chlorine!

Then one smart person said to drain the pool and refill it because people needed to swim.

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I really like the way you have actively tried to develop your writing style this week. You have chosen to write a simple narrative based around the prompt. It flows well and does not include some random ‘crazy’ events. The ending is simple and satisfying.
I also love the way you chose to begin your narrative- more interesting than the common “One day” or “Once…” beginnings you have often used in the past.
Well done and keep up the great work,


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